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Maria through the wormhole by ExplositionRooster5

:iconito-saith-webb:
I know you requested a critique and I am sorry for the lateness but I had commissions and a gallery show to attend to and I make my living by my art.

Pros: I can see that some love and dedication went into the piece which is always a plus. The over all concept and design is interesting. It looks like you are trying to over come the fear of overlapping which is a hard lesson to learn.

Cons: While I can see that you are trying to overcome the fear of overlaping you still need to push this more which should help with your foreshortening. I feel like you were trying to fore shorten the arms but because the overlaping wasn't there it makes it look like the arms are pointed down and are stubby which is ruining the proportions. The breasts are too high on her chest and they should be about half a head lower. The hair overlaping the face shows some poor planning or making a mistake of where you were intending to go and tried to fudge the result. Sketch out your drawing lightly in pencil or better yet a light blue color pencil first and then ink over that. Then you scan it removing color or xerox it and the blue lines will vanish. Your inking could use some work. Try showing a variation of weight in your light to give the drawing movement and depth: think of your pen or brush strokes like a roller coster and you will get there.

Hope that helps.
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:iconexplositionrooster5:
ExplositionRooster5 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you. It does help me out quite a bit.
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:iconito-saith-webb:
Ito-Saith-Webb Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
:)
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:iconexplositionrooster5:
ExplositionRooster5 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Think you could do another? If you don't want to then I understand, but after what you gave me I want to learn more. so if it doesn't bother you, could you please critique this one:

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:iconito-saith-webb:
Ito-Saith-Webb Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Find the critique thread I have going and post it there. The thumbnail isn't working here. Eventually I will get to it. If you want to learn stuff before then however try reading these two articles I wrote on my artblog. [link] and [link]
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